The really awesome melodies around 2:00 and 5:13? Hmm, I also hear some pretty awesome melodies at 0:59 and 2:58 xD That new pad you added sounds pretty amazing.
To be honest, I can only see one flaw (cuz we made it maybe? :D). It's the ending. It kind of sounds a bit strange when the progression doesn't finish, it just doesn't seem to work well because the melody sounds incomplete.
Oh well, nothing can be perfect, and I couldn't have done a better job on it. Good work both of us :D! Really enjoyed working with you on this :). Learned a few things too :) Breakbeat was new to me, so was the top half.
Guess I won't be seeing much of you anymore except for weekends, school's a big prob :(. Oh well, thanks for this great experience :)